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    Author: vedanta19
    Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 503/510/143
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    recreating and reaching,
    understanding and mermerising,
    wondering and hoping,
    smiling and listening,
    praying and waiting -

    when sonnets turn into whispers,
    a twilight paints shades of night,
    hoping to impress some moon faraway;

    maybe when a struggling sunflower
    searches it's own fragrance,
    smiling sometimes, hoping the other times;

    or when a lone painter paints self in various dimensions,
    using mixed and confused colours -
    leaving it sometimes just grey - mermerising and recreating;

    a silent sea of dreams,
    questioining my yesterdays, tormenting my present, eclipsing those tomorrows,
    waiting and multipying my worries;

    reaching pains of you, hurting self
    twice squared to a million, dividing joys of self,
    logically proving, hopelessly in love mostly;

    or just like a 'perhaps'
    untitled me in your treasured existence.




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      Nice work, you show some of the troubles of life being in love.
    I like it. Good write.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2008-04-10 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      hey i liked this one to
    this really makes one stop and think of their own existance in life

    good word choice as well

    sandman
    | Posted on 2008-04-10 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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