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    dots Submission Name: dewdrops on a dreamdots
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    Author: vedanta19
    Elite Ratio:    3.28 - 503/510/143
    Words: 217
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    if you say so,
    dearest darling you, so be it,
    as sunflowers to a ego-filled sun,
    i bow out of love;

    those times when heart said prayers
    for you and only you,
    you slapped me, cursed me
    being so full of love;

    those nights when slept
    with tears and hopefilled dreams
    of you,
    you visited me,
    accusing of manipulations
    too many;

    when reds of your own pulse,
    visited a mere me,
    i looked to you as a wall,
    strong, dependable and faith,
    your fall
    breaking me
    my love for you,
    unbreaking me - over and over again;

    thinking, my darling
    can you stay till the very end,
    when storms of disputes touched us
    knowingly, unknowingly
    i prayed you would,
    unshaking my faith in you,
    as

    the highest mountain that treasures a rare rainbow,
    a little twinkle that adds aura to a forgotten star,
    a drop of missing water finding a playful oyster-blessed ocean,
    or
    maybe
    a hand of hug clutching a weak soul - assuring and reassuring;

    could you be that strong?

    simply
    you and me loved -
    you shaken with moments - when love was passable,
    me with prayers - thinking true love so very rare,

    do you really realise?

    i love you.




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      Vedanta, your writes are always filled with emotion. This lovely prose verse aptly traverses the gauntlet of wonder and doubt that love entails, and exposes the pain and fear that being in love with someone causes!

    Excellent heartfelt write, lovely lady!
    | Posted on 2008-04-13 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the natural emotion within the words of this poem. It may not be the intention, or it may be, but this poem reminded me of an abusive relationship where the victim is too much in love to leave. Maybe that's just me.
    | Posted on 2008-04-10 00:00:00 | by hybridsongwrite | [ Reply to This ]
      hey and hi its been along time since i seen one of yor posts
    i like this one as usual you alwaz seem to put alot of emotion to yor thoughts
    well done and i hope all is good with you

    sandman
    | Posted on 2008-04-10 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      Neat poem of "love on the edge" of an abyss....hard when the other half doesn't seem to care a whole bunch... fine poem... braov... bravo ...
    | Posted on 2008-04-10 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      Neat poem of "love on the edge" of an abyss....hard when the other half doesn't seem to care a whole bunch... fine poem... braov... bravo ...
    | Posted on 2008-04-10 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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