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    dots Submission Name: Mirror:The Carlyle (A poetic suicide)dots
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    Author: Rex Gold
    ASL Info:    18/m/U.S.A
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 60/46/67
    Words: 358
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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       Just an interpretation of some things I go through.But every lines is truth relating to what is and what is'nt also what could be.You have to study it to actually get me.So that sux for all you fucking speed readers.I feel for ya'll.


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    dotsMirror:The Carlyle (A poetic suicide)dots
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    {Marvelous Chase...}
    So the pen is mightier than the sword
    good lord
    Psychiatrist asked me
    what has flagged me to become this.
    So I said it was slits & slices
    my flesh, sweet pizza
    with the topping of the cheesy lifestyle
    breezy slight smiles
    grins of sin
    Getting tired of sayin' who I am
    I'm not a poet
    becuase I cheated on those exams
    I don't want to walk alone
    So I'll post under the street lamp
    (Did the Carlyle build me?)
    to present an examp of full extent
    words hurt me,
    actions turnt me,
    into this monster
    that is rarely heard
    and to me horrible is no scary term
    but every dark worm in my stomach
    comes from insults deserved
    Can't touch hands
    you know shit about
    The mirror
    is my inside
    (As the eyez and pants sag low)
    is my straight jacket,
    my straight jacket defeats hackin'
    In other words
    Most geniuses are insane
    I'm neither
    but I take blame
    (Fine then, deal with it)
    You cannot have the truth
    if it even kills you to think of it
    (Drink slushes)
    Paradox, blink nothin' of it
    Here's my monthly alimony to Poetry,
    my wardrobe to a homey
    my best breathing book to the lonely
    my shoes to the phoneys
    last but not least
    My legend to a trash can
    A mad man, a sad wand
    held by a bad hatter
    (Legends demise)
    Gave everything away
    I'm spreaded out
    like ideas for Citi Group
    here's the missing loop
    I can't outdo myself
    a belt buckle outshines my face
    (Any envy in this Gold?)
    Say the man never existed
    Ever seen his faith?
    Ever seen his grace?
    Ever seen his face?
    It can't be the red indian face shift
    nothing but bones underneath
    2 boys in one bod
    Did God make a God for to speak?
    No.Just one boy tormented by 7 demons
    which represents the 7 Ls in the name
    An emperor with no reign
    An emissary that never arrived nor came
    (Who the fuck is this guy?!)
    Just a name engraved on a plush crown
    and somehow found..
    (Myth?)
    As if any Jesus ever is...Carlyle




    Submitted on 2008-04-11 01:43:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      the first time i read this i had a hard time trying to find a pattern in rythm...
    and then i re read it...and it flowed so much like a freestyle rap...
    and when i said it aloud with the beat in my head...it made a helluva lot more sense.

    i can't point out any one place that i didn't like. of course there are parts that i don't understand...[maybe if i knew more about you it wouldn't be so fuzzy]

    and i can't point out any one place that was my favorite...
    every time i find a line i read the next one and am already taken with it.

    it was an excellent write.
    | Posted on 2008-04-11 00:00:00 | by was_i_ever_real | [ Reply to This ]
      
    | Posted on 2008-04-11 00:00:00 | by was_i_ever_real | [ Reply to This ]



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