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    dots Submission Name: Wingsdots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsWingsdots
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    My wings are most stupendous, fair,
    So leather-like and waxing strong,
    I fly from dusk to crimson dawn,
    High in the air.

    I know not what I am, yet know
    I am most lovely to behold,
    My eyes are green, my hair of gold
    Cool breezes blow.

    My form was by a goddess made,
    More beautiful than Sirens sleek,
    The strength of steel, frail as Belleek.
    Men are afraid.

    I seek love and men to woo me,
    Yet in their eyes I see the fear,
    Iím filled with pain, and shed a tear!
    Please, pursue me!

    Then one young swain out in his leas,
    He caught my eye for he was bold,
    He kissed and stroked my hair of gold.
    This boy could please!

    He had no fear, but only care
    That I had suffered solitude,
    Romantically I was pursued,
    Up to my lair.

    I was like one raised from the dead,
    This strong and caring, lovely boy,
    Taught me true love, and taught me joy,
    And we were wed.




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      Quite a story! What is her name? My thoughts turn to legends/myths as I read your lines and attempt to absorb their mysterious complexities. Good form usage! Sharon
    | Posted on 2008-04-13 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't know what to make of this one! It seems to be about an Angel created by Godesses? But, it has a fascinating story scheme, and excellent structure and rhyme. It was delightful to read, but I just couldn't figure it out?!?
    | Posted on 2008-04-13 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      hahah good job. it was consistant throught :) good flow to! well done!
    | Posted on 2008-04-12 00:00:00 | by BarleyBreathing | [ Reply to This ]


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