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    dots Submission Name: Diablo's Gamedots
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    Author: Diablo Tapitio
    ASL Info:    30
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 85/111/62
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsDiablo's Gamedots
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    I say the things you yearn to hear,
    Always and forever my dear,
    I hold you tight as I whisper your name,
    welcome to Diablo's Game.

    I gaze into your brown eyes,
    and I slowly weave a web of lies.
    I kiss your lips and stroke your hair,
    as we walk the shore without a care.

    We leave footprints in the sand,
    as we stroll hand in hand,
    You feel eternity when you look into my eyes,
    Just one of Diablo's lies.

    I really dont want to be this way,
    It is stitched in my DNA,
    Our Passion Ignites the nights hot flames,
    but in the morning you will know Diablo's Games.

    you will surely see it clear,
    when you wakr up and I am not hear,
    by the time we see the setting sun,
    You will know that Diablo is done




    Submitted on 2008-04-11 11:13:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I feel this is a typical man no offense but that's just how they exactly like diablo's game. It's in there DNA it seems cause they all do the same things. they're cowards they can't love just lust for what they want breaking everyone hearts for the 5 min of satisfaction.

    This poem is nice but makes me angry cause I have to many feelings and could just go off on this poem...lol I enjoy it because its real and ppl feel this way. It's just to bad I'm negative about the feelings I hold. I felt this piece really hit a sensitive spot.

    Really did enjoy reading it though.

    Dez
    | Posted on 2010-04-07 00:00:00 | by Stargazer89 | [ Reply to This ]
      You say, "I really dont want to be this way," but the wording seems so cold that it gives the impression that it doesn't bother you. I don't know, maybe it's just me.

    I love it.

    The only critique I have would be to fix the few spelling mistakes which I couldn't care less about.

    Anyway, I really enjoyed this.

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2008-05-01 00:00:00 | by Razor2TheRosary | [ Reply to This ]
      hey and hi, this was good atleast you let them no what yor thinking before they get there

    well done and great choice of words

    sandman
    | Posted on 2008-04-11 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this is a great poem. seriously this is excellent.
    | Posted on 2008-04-11 00:00:00 | by cor | [ Reply to This ]
      aww. this poem is sad. I wouldn't want to play Diablo's game! I would cry
    Nice job writing. You are one of my favorite writers on here, no lie. I think I will keep reading what you have to say.
    Angel
    | Posted on 2008-04-11 00:00:00 | by bubble_popper15 | [ Reply to This ]


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