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    dots Submission Name: Life...dots
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    Author: bubble_popper15
    ASL Info:    17, f, confused
    Elite Ratio:    4.13 - 201/127/45
    Words: 165
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 922
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsLife...dots
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    Do you ever get the feeling that you're always out of place?
    No matter what you do you have a frown upon your face?
    Ever feel like life is just a race?
    And if you don't finish in first you'll be just a big disgrace?

    Do you ever feel like you're just a waste of time?
    No matter what you do you just can't seem to get him off your mind?
    Ever feel like you're running behind?
    And if you don't catch up you'll fuckin lose your mind?

    Do you ever feel like you need to run away?
    No matter how hard you try, you always have to stay?
    Ever feel like you don't have the right words to say?
    And you never, ever get things to go your way?

    To me right now life is bad
    No matter the situation, I'm always rather sad
    Everybody and everything always makes me mad
    I hope that one day again I can be glad.




    Submitted on 2008-04-11 12:17:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      nice poem.....yeah i feel that way too
    it does suck. but you can get through it
    im homeless right now......i had nowhere to go but they stuck me in a hotel til they can find me a place to live.....anyways, things get bad and bad things happen but youll get through it no matter what.......when i read this poem i could feel the words creep under my skin and explode in my heart and take over my soul........sara
    | Posted on 2008-04-21 00:00:00 | by Kornfreakinabox | [ Reply to This ]
      simplistic, but not awful.
    i think that you need to mature your style a little bit, but other than that this is a lovely piece and I would love to see some of your work in 2 years. i am sure it will be masterful.
    | Posted on 2008-04-14 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]


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