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    dots Submission Name: Scriptdots
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    Author: SavedDragon
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 303/258/84
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       To write is an art form, freedom of a hand and gentle mind.


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    dotsScriptdots
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    The hand wiggled with the pen, scripted words
    Emotions then followed like rivers to an ocean
    Thought after thought, the ideology
    Came together like a jigsaw puzzle

    Substance and mode travel through air
    Fingers tap lightly unto metal
    A ballpoint pen danced on papyrus paper
    And at last a painted picture came together

    A beautiful thing this thing called life
    The trees gave us life, hear the winds breeze
    A faint whisper to the ear replies
    Isn't life a beautiful thing?

    The mind's state becomes paralyzed
    The arm at a determined halt
    Then the translation appears
    The languages of the brain, into a physicality

    The skyscraping landmarks, marks the land mass
    Life looks down through a clouded glass
    The building tips only with equilibrium
    And balance plants the feet back to the ground

    The wind blows rough
    The lamps bulb blacks out, now sharpness
    The lit candle then brings light
    But everything in life soon dies out to darkness

    The hand clutches the plastic covered ink
    Freedom of the mind has slipped
    The wrist moves to a certain motion
    And fills with black ink, the script




    Submitted on 2008-04-11 12:37:55     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      hey and hi this was great i liked the way you put the sequence of why and what makes people write the way they do
    i guess for some it coms natural and some struggle

    sandman
    | Posted on 2008-04-11 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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