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    dots Submission Name: The day we're gonna die.dots
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    Author: SetmyselfonFire
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    Words: 149
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    dotsThe day we're gonna die.dots
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    Where the children lay and where the bodies lay abroad
    Thereís a sense of loneliness, no purpose and no god
    I donít want to leave you here but I think youíll do some good
    And if they shoot you down, theyíll still remember why you stood

    They say
    You canít change the demons if the angels keep their ways
    You canít save the world if all you do is pray.
    Iíll choose that boy before that kid , itís what I had to do
    Tell me that Iím wrong but youíd kill your baby too
    I canít say Iíll never lie
    So continue writing songs
    About the day your gonna die.

    If thereís some hope beneath the fire
    That made dreams go up in flames
    Youíll probably be their savior
    And theyíll ask you for your name.








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      This was very good. It reminds me of my first submission. Being lost, metaphorically of course about life and questioning religion and what comes next. Read this is what happens next pt b if you have time, i think you'll notice the similarities.
    | Posted on 2014-08-13 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]


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