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    dots Submission Name: interpretive dance of a razordots
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    Author: Syn
    Elite Ratio:    4.71 - 115/136/83
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Prose/Dark
    Total Views: 1048
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 795



    Description:
       let's get this straight: i do not cut myself.
    i disapprove of it, if you will.

    but i got this idea...
    and it looked cool on paper.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsinterpretive dance of a razordots
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    pretty-pretty
    sick and pretty

    each
    ------
    one
    ------
    of
    ------
    these
    ------
    is
    ------
    for
    ------
    you
    ------

    {years ago i had the heart of the devil sewn into my chest and i've been trying to kill myself ever since}

    :::psylence schreams in dysorderli fashyn:::

    :::skitsofrenic parranoya begyns to sett in:::

    there's only one choice to choose from
    and the rest are the same

    heartache comes running to me
    black is grey and grey is love

    we shall celebrate with bitter wine
    and the finest blood in town






    Submitted on 2008-04-13 03:27:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Ah, you didn't use the magic word!

    CRIMSON!!

    But you know, for a cutter poem, honestly, this is one of the best I've seen (though I tend to avoid them like the plague). I especially liked what you did with

    :::psylence schreams in dysorderli fashyn:::

    :::skitsofrenic parranoya begyns to sett in:::

    And the underscoring to simulate the act itself. Clever girl!

    I just wonder . . . were you shaving your legs, or . . .

    hahaha



    | Posted on 2008-05-06 00:00:00 | by Vancrown | [ Reply to This ]


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