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    dots Submission Name: lapsus linguaedots
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    Author: Syn
    Elite Ratio:    4.71 - 115/136/83
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    cruel and oh-so-punctual
    my subliminal voice-over takes me under
    and churns out a venom so noxious
    i dare not speak a word of it

    depraved and demoralized
    my conscience never got a funeral
    it was murdered by the noise in my head
    i might not mean a word of it

    iniquitous and unstable
    metaphor beware of my wretched slips of tongue
    i could rip a literal heart out with these words

    Freud's got nothing on me


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      the last line...that's genius.

    poor freud, with his pipe and his nose steaked in coke, and his ever so male perogatives...i've always felt a little sad for him, though.

    slips of the tongue can be dangerous.
    especially for us ladies.

    brilliant!
    | Posted on 2008-04-13 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]


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