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    Author: EEKS
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    Words: 369
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    Once upon a school time fucked up romance, torn up jeans and paint stained t-shirts
    You had some pretty asian girlfriend
    While I was slummin with some bum bass players in backseats
    And I was carnivorous, a hungry girl with teeth, just ready to eat
    Tangled up in trust and dressed up in disorder
    I fell for you like I always do
    Sharp, fast and with nothing to consider

    Once upon a time I was nice
    Thats got to be true, Its just got to be true, all right?
    The one thing between us will always be you, it will always be you
    No matter what you say, even if I never break
    Cause once upon a time, I made sense, and I was not so on the edge
    Its always makes me grit my teeth and bite my lip cause I leave things feeling so unfinished

    You say its gotta be ok, you said its all gonna be all right
    But who knows what tomorrow holds when all we can make it through is tonight
    Ive got five fingers and two hands and one trigger and all I can hold onto is you, baby its all you
    I could write a song for every day I love you and in the end have a million pages
    But nothing means nothing and words are just something to fill the space
    When all I want is another day before you're gone away

    Once upon a time I was nice
    Thats got to be true, Its just got to be true, all right?
    The one thing between us will always be you, it will always be you
    Cause once upon a time, I made sense, and I was not so on the edge
    But with every breath I am getting better
    And its all because of you
    And we can't end yet cause its unfinished

    I don't want to make anything harder than I have to
    But don't leave me unraveling
    All I want to do is be with you, so stay with me, thats what you'll do
    Cause its a damn shame to leave a good thing
    Unfinished










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