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    dots Submission Name: teh 8th deadly sindots

    Author: robertbwell
    ASL Info:    23/m/Wyoming
    Elite Ratio:    3 - 92/150/75
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsteh 8th deadly sindots

    She lets her hair down and
    Says little birdie, don’t fly away
    She wraps her hands around you
    Shows you to your cage
    Even if she decides to leave
    Your eyes are statues
    They will never sway
    Trapped like flies on paper
    Never to know the future another way

    Her hair a flowing river
    It’s jet black just like the night
    It engulfs your senses
    Your touch goes with out a fight
    Even if it held a chance
    Her eyes are flames, they’d burn you down
    Even if you tried to run
    Her scent, it follows, it would hunt you down

    She’s the 8th deadly sin
    Your coffins sealed your there to stay
    For better or for worse
    You have no other choice
    can’t look away
    After all she’s become your life
    Even though you long for a better life

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