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Author: jblomberg
ASL Info:    23/m/WI
Elite Ratio:    2.82 - 11 /12 /12
Words: 219
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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I went back once, to see the deck 
we built all those years ago; to see
the boards we stained on those hot
summer days, secretly wishing we had
someplace else to go. I went back once,

to see the wood we cut and stacked
between the pines; the oak and maple
trees we chopped and burned during
those lazy winter days spent playing
cards, and making every excuse

to stay indoors. I went back once,
to see the wooden fort we built way-up
in the trees; to take my shoes off
and escape through the trails of berries
we never thought we’d leave. I went back

once, to breathe in the fresh scent of lilies
and dandelions that always lingered in the air,
and to remember how our clothes smelt when
the wind would blow their fragrance through
our young wistful lives. I went back once,

to listen to the bluebirds song of a morning
content to be awake and alive, and to see
if the cardinals still made their nest within
the lilac bushes we kept so neat, so beautiful
to smell and watch swaying in the wind.

I went back once—only once.

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