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    dots Submission Name: The Lost Rosedots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsThe Lost Rosedots
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    Up the iron mountain
    And down the dark ravine,
    Past the haunted fountain
    Beyond the rose bush screen.

    Keep back from the old tomb
    Long lost within the reeds
    Breathe not her sweet perfume
    Here where the red rose bleeds.

    She was once my lover
    Upon the new mown grass
    White clouds then would hover,
    Above a lake like glass.

    And now that lake is dry,
    Our love it is no more,
    And all the world’s a sigh
    That echoes to the shore.

    Here I come in Winter,
    Far down this dark defile,
    Watch the moonlight splinter
    Her haunted granite pile.

    No more is the cooing
    Of love birds in the nest,
    No more singing, wooing,
    For she has gone to rest.




    Submitted on 2008-04-14 14:41:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow, i love this one
    you always have such intresting posts.

    my fav verse i would have to say is

    "Keep back from the old tomb
    Long lost within the reeds
    Breathe not her sweet perfume
    Here where the red rose bleeds"

    this poem is so detailed

    you have talent

    -Bella
    | Posted on 2008-04-28 00:00:00 | by IsabellaAurora | [ Reply to This ]
      NICE,
    very sad and one of the best ive read recently,
    your wordplay was wonderful,very ghostly,and natural,you have a gift my friend
    | Posted on 2008-04-16 00:00:00 | by Diablo Tapitio | [ Reply to This ]
      This has got to be the only love poem where I felt like something was going to jump out at me!
    Nice.... even wicked, I like it, some how a love win or lose is still a love remembered and never forgotten.

    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2008-04-15 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]
      Aaah, love, and love lost! Some of poetry's most fertile subjects, and you have managed this excellent tale well! It has both the ghostly qualities of bygone lovers, and the allure of a haunting love story! Excellent as ever, and a delight to read!
    | Posted on 2008-04-15 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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