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    dots Submission Name: the lavender of alwaysdots

    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsthe lavender of alwaysdots

    in the deadly hollow
    of the world
    i've found space between
    the remembered things.
    a place where you alone
    have come & gone
    in memories
    more terrible than air.

    could i ask a feather
    to breathe a storm more perfectly
    than the sadness
    of my heart's companion?
    or is each day
    merely another step
    towards distant mild oblivion?

    i recall
    slipping through the sheets
    like august fingers
    over warm wind.
    how, inside me,
    tiny holocausts
    were the prophecy
    that i became.

    & you,
    so mixed with the lavender of always,
    would fall into the night
    like the pink that you are
    with all those fiery hells
    inside you
    where you hide them.

    to have to feel pain
    to feel anything
    is working backwards.
    when will adoration open flowers
    into your secret brain?
    when will memory
    be more perfect than air?

    every broken beat
    is a war inside the chest...

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      Your words are hypnotic, Merlo. And the way you rage so gracefully to maneuver through such weights is both admirable and inspiring. It also seems effortless because your writing makes me feel like you let the emotions just flow with this unstoppable need to, you know, be - have form and vulnerability in the convent of words. This, your method, is the perfect device for healing. And it is also Poetry at its raw and argueable most beautiful form.

    It surprises me that not a lot of people comment on your work. I just hope that they have, at least, read them.
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