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    dots Submission Name: Keeping to myself and ruin.dots
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    Author: Zai
    ASL Info:    18/m/Snohomish Washington
    Elite Ratio:    5.31 - 35/46/42
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 85
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 680



    Description:
       It's a bit shorter then what I'm used to, and the title is just one of the lines I liked 'cause I couldn't think of anything to call it.

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    dotsKeeping to myself and ruin.dots
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    I never meant to be like this,
    I never meant to not do that,
    I was supposed to be normal,
    and now I'm stuck wondering:

    What I'll do and where I'll do it,
    Will I see truth and not go through it,
    Will I stay blind under clear fluid,
    Keeping to myself and ruin.

    I broke a vow unrepeatable,
    Spent some time uncontainable,
    Forfit a love unbelieveable,
    Lost control, it's impossible,

    What I'll do and when I'll do it,
    Will I find peace and not confuse it,
    Will I be numb to life's sweet music,
    Keeping to myself and ruin.




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    ||| Comments |||
      I'm mad that no one has commented on this. I think it's beautiful, Zai. Like...really. I love the feeling emanating from these lyrics. So cold and beautiful. My favorite lines are ummm... "Keeping to myself and ruin"
    and
    "I broke a vow unrepeatable,
    Spent some time uncontainable,
    Forfit a love unbelieveable,
    Lost control, it's impossible,"
    I love it. Absolutely adore it. There are few people in this world who can't say that these words sing to them. I like this one. I mean, you've written other pieces that I've loved even more, but I don't hear the tune you have and that's probably a big part. <3 you're amazing.
    ~Me
    | Posted on 2008-08-07 00:00:00 | by Hyperbolypses | [ Reply to This ]


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