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    dots Submission Name: Dear Mimidots
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    Author: Squall Leon Hea
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 104/79/29
    Words: 202
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       For a dear friend and someone whom wa special to many

    Mimi


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    dotsDear Mimidots
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    What is this I feel?
    A feeling too real

    Floating on a cloud
    I was on bed with music loud

    Now it's silent and calm
    Open my eye and see my palm

    Blocking my vision with something red
    To my realization a tear I shed

    The red was . . . Blood
    Quantity and desity as mud

    Where am I?
    Blood covering my eye

    I cannot see
    What happened to me?

    I don't hear a thing
    I fell a string and on it I cling

    " Sweetheart don't worry "
    " everything will be fine" " sorry "

    Two voices said to me
    But them I can't see

    Overwhelming comfort came upon
    My soul , and warmth of the sun

    I open my eyes one mre
    And happiness fill my core

    My parents that long have missed
    Now I see and forgot my list

    Of numbers of hugs and kisses for them
    Since then the world never been dim



    Best of luck , sweet dear Mimi
    Best lovely dreams , little dreamy

    Mimi , we love you dearly
    So be happy and fly freely




    Submitted on 2008-04-15 02:34:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ah, kinda stream-of-consciousness-meets-timid-hip-hop at high noon under the moon... interseting, intriging, abstruse, and a tad arcane, but not bad at all.... bravo...
    | Posted on 2008-04-15 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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