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    dots Submission Name: Theatredots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsTheatredots
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    Everyone gather,
    It's another show,
    It's been a little while,
    the theatre was closed,
    And know
    Now as opposed to that,
    This is the way
    I'm supposed to act,
    Calm, cool, collected,
    Undesperated, unstressed and,
    No care in the world,
    To invest in,
    But guess, it's all too different,
    Life is a moving rope,
    My hands keep sliping,
    As well as loosing hope,





    Submitted on 2008-04-15 13:44:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      OK so i had to read this a few times, but i think i get it now; operative word being "think".

    You've been away from other people-hiding within yourself- for sometimes, and now you're ready to come out. But it's sort of like a metamorphosis, though not a complete change, just a fake one.

    And then life comes at you again, and change occurs again, and your "part" is different.

    I just thought the "rope" image could have been connected a bit more to the theater; eventually i got the picture of a rope that pulls the curtains, but even that is a bit cloudy, for me.

    good job! =]
    | Posted on 2008-04-18 00:00:00 | by TheStillSilence | [ Reply to This ]


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