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    dots Submission Name: Face Down dots
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    Author: bloddyrazorgirl
    ASL Info:    18/f/az
    Elite Ratio:    1.14 - 41/35/40
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       i believe i wrote this in eigth grade. this is one powerful piece that tells the story of what was going on that time of my life


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    dotsFace Down dots
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    Sitting by myself in the dark
    And everyone keeps breaking my heart
    I try to stay strong and not cry
    But the tears fall down despite my tries

    People keep saying that I'm strong
    That I can make it by myself
    I try to keep steady and not break down
    But the pressure makes me fall face down

    My friends ignore me and act like I'm fine
    And they don't even hear me cry
    I try to keep going without their support
    But I think suicide and slice my arms




    Submitted on 2008-04-15 16:47:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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