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    Author: Ali Marie
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 105/106/76
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    I just can't seem to write you
    My pen trembles on blank space.
    I can't grasp what you were.
    Now you're a ghost I seem to have misplaced.
    I can't put into words how I feel,
    I'm combinations of afraid, content, and alone.
    I'm at a loss for what to do now
    I believe I can make it on my own.




    Submitted on 2008-04-15 20:56:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this, this has power in it. It shows a a healthy fear for your adventure withiout you being afraid. It also shows no resentment for history. I know I wake up with a blank page everyday if you get me..

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    | Posted on 2008-04-16 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]


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