This poem is ok. But i have a few suggestions to make it better:
1. proofread. when you do this you catch spelling errors that are a distraction to your reader
2. add punctuation. Punctuation helps the reader to see how you meant it to be read, when to pause and reflect and when to skim and read quickly.
By doing these two simple things, your poem could be greatly enhanced. If you do these, drop me a note on my page and I'll comment further.