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    dots Submission Name: My coming priority...dots
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    Author: StylerDen
    ASL Info:    29/Male/Malaysia
    Elite Ratio:    2.98 - 38/59/51
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 822
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       for the girl of my dreams... for the one with the green light.. :)


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    dotsMy coming priority...dots
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    My heart screams when you are near,
    When i see the shadow of your wings,
    You are my current goal for the year,
    I won’t forsake the signs ive seen.

    The many times ive read,
    In the woody mount of green,
    My only request is said,
    That i want you to be with me.
    I long for the moment,
    When there's only you and me,
    When we move in the same motion,
    When we both finally agree

    And when we are finally together,
    You will be my 1st priority.




    Submitted on 2008-04-16 07:09:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Not bad. The rhyme scheme is simple, yet clear. It's not phenomenal, but it is a great declaration of your love for a girl. I really hope you get this girl. I can feel the wanting.
    Good write.
    Darkwinged
    | Posted on 2008-04-16 00:00:00 | by darkwinged | [ Reply to This ]


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