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    dots Submission Name: I guess this is how we begin our lives togetherdots
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    Author: anguished_child
    ASL Info:    16/M/FL
    Elite Ratio:    4.03 - 69/51/57
    Words: 105
    Class/Type: Story/Being a Teen
    Total Views: 70
    Average Vote:    2.0000
    Bytes: 515



    Description:
       what has happened and what I want to happen


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    dotsI guess this is how we begin our lives togetherdots
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    yeah I guess this is how we do begin our lives together I get a job and I motivate you to get a job and I just work until they can't work me no more and I earn all this money
    go into the core get out into two years marry you and then start a business and then hopefully one have kids and riase they.
    i don't know I there just so much i want to happen. that hasn't happened and just like uh?
    but anyways I love you and you always on my mind I love you
    Always and Forever




    Submitted on 2008-04-16 09:11:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This has no good details and the spelling errors are terrible... as is the grammar. No offense dude, but this would be much better if you put more effort into it.

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    Nikkki
    | Posted on 2008-05-20 00:00:00 | by Razor2TheRosary | [ Reply to This ]
      baby,
    time will come and our lives will get more...there...right now weal and it will be fine. So don't worry.

    Love,
    Carrie
    | Posted on 2008-04-17 00:00:00 | by dismal_s child | [ Reply to This ]


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