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    dots Submission Name: Written on the Winddots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 125
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsWritten on the Winddots
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    Over all the Earth they say
    The wind is liege, so rules all,
    The breeze, or the storm windís call
    When all is blown away.

    Then at dusk some child may pray
    For an angel to come forth,
    Out of the West, East, or North
    With wind up from the bay.

    Some sad lover in dismay,
    Whose hopeís faded with the dawn,
    Prostrate on the withered lawn,
    With the dust soon blows away.

    What choice I, to go or stay?
    In this valley thick with stones,
    Where the wind forever groans,
    Blows my fragile hopes away.

    Dead leaves in a sad ballet
    Swirl around the hill and vale,
    Where I wait, alone and pale,
    Like those leaves, then blow away.




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      Dynamite title! I find the Wind fascinating, and an extremely poetic subject, although I can associate it with many disasters when I was a youngster! I think of the Wind as being able to contain the spirits of everyone who has gone before, and thus has much drama to calm or agitate it, or many stories to tell!!

    Eventually, we all are destined to be come dust, and sooner or later, blown about by and in the Wind!

    This verse is delightful, and wistful as the wind! Excellent write, very enjoyable!

    | Posted on 2008-04-16 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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