The Fountain by EmpathicAya

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Submission Name: The Fountain dots

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Author:	EmpathicAya
ASL Info:	13+6/unMale/Your Mind
Elite Ratio:	7.66 - 665/396/86
Words:	56

Class/Type:	Poetry/Nostalgia
Total Views:	173
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	483

Description:
I spent the weekend in Canada with my school's music department. This is the fountain I saw.

The Fountain dots

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A mist of ancient civilization
clawed upwards
towards an outdated God
begging

for acknowledgment
and for

escape. Holding
likeness of a new-born
reaching
to the sun.

Showering antiquated
wisdom

from their self-assimilated
soul
screaming "Nietzche was right!
I am
that wheel spinning
from
it's own center."

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Moo

No this isn't a pm but you've done the Goddess justice here.

How is it that man and nature are constantly in complimentary
positions and blowing smoke and water at each other?

No Nietzsche didn't say God needed to be watered did he?

I think it's art and that art needs to be the new religion, and then
as we create, we worship. It feels so good to say that.

This one is coming home with me. And I want to know the story
of your trip when you have time.

Love,

Nan
| Posted on 2008-04-26 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]

"towards" is not a word. Spell checker be damned! The word is simply "toward".

I don't know how (collectively) we English speakers added that s but it's unnecessary.

But how does an outdated god go about being ignored? Shouldn't it cease begging and commence miracle making?

Skeptical bipedal scientist types today require their eyes to see it twice - because if it can't be replicated it didn't happen.

(hedge betting! safe players! and etc!)

Humorous, indeed, Aya - the capital G and Nietzsche?

Come peel this cheshire grin off of my face and put it on the page this was originally written on.

| Posted on 2008-04-17 00:00:00 | by Fizzlethorpe | [ Reply to This ]

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