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    dots Submission Name: True Love's Formdots

    Author: nevender
    ASL Info:    23 M Uganda
    Elite Ratio:    5.58 - 350/301/83
    Words: 200
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsTrue Love's Formdots

    Put your heart where my eyes can see,
    Lay bare all your soul to me.
    Can I steal a glance into your thoughts?
    Can I be sure your love's not a plot?

    Where is friendship without gain?
    Where was beauty seen in what was plain?
    Love seems easy to do
    When there's something to gain from you.

    Words are always easy to say
    When the chest is empty and the heart's away,
    The promises that seemed to weigh
    Turn from golden array to old and grey.

    So will a real friend please stand up?
    Someone who didn't regard you as the X on a treasure map?
    Will a person tell me then
    That they began to love
    Without expecting gain?

    Could somebody finally say
    That they loved you indeed?
    Not because of a thing they sensed
    That made you smell like frankincense?

    That even though you were short and stout or tall and thin,
    Arrogant, irritable or gentle and meek
    they loved you with no trophy to seek?
    Make our eyes see what love is meant to be,
    A lender that forgets the debtor
    A giver that gives with heart not head.

    Submitted on 2008-04-16 16:05:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this was incredibly honest, and pure. though difficult to take from your point of view, your words offer an opinion, an idea, with which i can identify and relate.

    "Where is friendship without gain?
    Where was beauty seen in what was plain?
    Love seems easy to do
    When there's something to gain from you."

    these words are what made the difference in your poem, what made me appreciate it for what it was and could possibly mean. while writers differ in opinion and topic, surely it is not impossible to believe that love is the common ground in writing, in words, as there is an impossible number of ways to define such 'love'. your words are well chosen and meaningful, and, as i am sure you might agree, it is not difficult to find a piece of work written for purpose.

    well done.
    | Posted on 2008-04-16 00:00:00 | by wonderbread1000 | [ Reply to This ]

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