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    dots Submission Name: Sleeping Dragondots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 885
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1288



    Description:
       Probably one of the longest pieces I've tried - stepping outside my minimalistic tendencies!

    A huge rock formation with branches, trees, flowers that looked like a sleeping dragon!

    Rock on with imagination - never forget what you used to feel when you were a kid left to your own devices!

    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share ES!!!
    tif ~*~


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    dotsSleeping Dragondots
    -------------------------------------------


    Sleeping Dragon
    napping under
    Mother Oak Tree

    Dreaming of the time
    when flight was fun
    & free ~*~

    The land was uninhabited ~
    plentiful as far as
    eye could see

    And, though his throat
    was filled with fire ~~~
    His heart was filled with glee

    His wings were strong & mighty
    Ever so strong was He

    Flying over hills & mountains
    Chasing river to the sea ~ ~

    But, time's become a lock
    & he doesn't have the key ))----<>

    So, he's turned to rock, tree & flower
    Only revealing himself 2 me

    And, as i sketch him
    he becomes a part of me

    Approaching him like a knight
    down on bended knee

    Not his phyusical body
    but his shining soul I see

    C for Camelot
    When Love was the motto
    & the decree

    Where selflessness reigned
    Truly the "i"
    was more "we"

    And, peace was felt by all
    No persecution to flee
    So, Love 2 fellow man,
    beast, environment
    was on something we
    could all agree




    Submitted on 2008-04-16 17:30:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i love this poem too much. its feels serene and i want that peace. the dragon u saw sounds soooo pretty. I like how u see the soul.




    peace

    | Posted on 2009-02-17 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]
      I sympathize with the dragon. I guess some things were a bit better when the forests still existed and every wild thing roamed free.... Interesting meter and good imagery.

    Happy dagger,

    Shadow
    | Posted on 2008-12-12 00:00:00 | by Shadowstar13 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hello,

    I really liked this, the way I see it, almost Puff the Majic Drqagon..esq. Using the imagination to explain natural occurences is as old as humanity, Nice write,

    Thanks,

    Spinn
    | Posted on 2008-04-25 00:00:00 | by Spin | [ Reply to This ]
      hey and hi
    thanx for all the comments
    i'm happy to see you made sence of what you read

    i liked this post alot you have alwaz painted a colourful picture with yor words
    hope all is well

    sandman
    | Posted on 2008-04-18 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow Tiff, this is an amazing piece of art and philosophy tied into one poem. In fact I like it so much it is going on my favs

    Love
    Me
    | Posted on 2008-04-17 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, i don't think I've seen someone use that many "ee" sounding words in one poem, tiff. Impressive ;)

    I have to say this is pretty good. You have a good piece here, but it needs some improvement. It kind of waned at "C for Camelot". I think you should take a look at it and maybe change the last 3 bits to something else. It just doesn't fit with the rest of it.

    Other than that, I found this rather compelling. I wish I could be like a chameleon man and blend into things...just like this dragon.

    Now you see me, now you don't.
    ;)

    ~AsiaticFox
    | Posted on 2008-04-17 00:00:00 | by AsiaticFox | [ Reply to This ]
      What a delightful artist's impression you have of the rock formation, and what a delightful prose poem you have created about it. It has the spirit and the mood of "Puff, The Magic Dragon", and has much soul and nostalgic philosophy associated with it!

    Delightful and enjoyable story, lovely lady!
    | Posted on 2008-04-17 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      It reminds me of Eragon without all the wars and battles.I like this b/c i can see the dragon flying over mountains emerging from it's own breathing fire in mid air.I just try to imagine it sleeping.I say it deserves 5stars.You call this a long piece but actuAlly it's just average.But hey maybe it's just long to you right? yeah figures .*THUMBS UP*.Peace and inspiration Epi.If everyone cared....
    | Posted on 2008-04-16 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
      Where selflessness reigned
    Truly the "i"
    was more "we"

    What truth lies in these words! We seemsto be living in the age of "what's in it for me?". I'd say bring back the dragons.

    :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2008-04-16 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]


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