Sleeping Dragon by Epiphany

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Submission Name: Sleeping Dragon dots

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Author:	Epiphany
ASL Info:	42/F/Universe
Elite Ratio:	4.38 - 3342/2139/390
Words:	184

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
Total Views:	1373
Average Vote:	4.0000
Bytes:	1288

Description:
Probably one of the longest pieces I've tried - stepping outside my minimalistic tendencies!

A huge rock formation with branches, trees, flowers that looked like a sleeping dragon!

Rock on with imagination - never forget what you used to feel when you were a kid left to your own devices!

love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share ES!!!
tif ~*~

Sleeping Dragon dots

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Sleeping Dragon
napping under
Mother Oak Tree

Dreaming of the time
when flight was fun
& free ~*~

The land was uninhabited ~
plentiful as far as
eye could see

And, though his throat
was filled with fire ~~~
His heart was filled with glee

His wings were strong & mighty
Ever so strong was He

Flying over hills & mountains
Chasing river to the sea ~ ~

But, time's become a lock
& he doesn't have the key ))----<>

So, he's turned to rock, tree & flower
Only revealing himself 2 me

And, as i sketch him
he becomes a part of me

Approaching him like a knight
down on bended knee

Not his phyusical body
but his shining soul I see

C for Camelot
When Love was the motto
& the decree

Where selflessness reigned
Truly the "i"
was more "we"

And, peace was felt by all
No persecution to flee
So, Love 2 fellow man,
beast, environment
was on something we
could all agree

Submitted on 2008-04-16 17:30:46 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i love this poem too much. its feels serene and i want that peace. the dragon u saw sounds soooo pretty. I like how u see the soul.

peace

| Posted on 2009-02-17 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]
  I sympathize with the dragon. I guess some things were a bit better when the forests still existed and every wild thing roamed free.... Interesting meter and good imagery.

Happy dagger,

Shadow
| Posted on 2008-12-12 00:00:00 | by Shadowstar13 | [ Reply to This ]
  Hello,

I really liked this, the way I see it, almost Puff the Majic Drqagon..esq. Using the imagination to explain natural occurences is as old as humanity, Nice write,

Thanks,

Spinn
| Posted on 2008-04-25 00:00:00 | by Spin | [ Reply to This ]
  hey and hi
thanx for all the comments
i'm happy to see you made sence of what you read

i liked this post alot you have alwaz painted a colourful picture with yor words
hope all is well

sandman
| Posted on 2008-04-18 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow Tiff, this is an amazing piece of art and philosophy tied into one poem. In fact I like it so much it is going on my favs

Love
Me
| Posted on 2008-04-17 00:00:00 | by forfila | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow, i don't think I've seen someone use that many "ee" sounding words in one poem, tiff. Impressive ;)

I have to say this is pretty good. You have a good piece here, but it needs some improvement. It kind of waned at "C for Camelot". I think you should take a look at it and maybe change the last 3 bits to something else. It just doesn't fit with the rest of it.

Other than that, I found this rather compelling. I wish I could be like a chameleon man and blend into things...just like this dragon.

Now you see me, now you don't.
;)

~AsiaticFox
| Posted on 2008-04-17 00:00:00 | by AsiaticFox | [ Reply to This ]
  What a delightful artist's impression you have of the rock formation, and what a delightful prose poem you have created about it. It has the spirit and the mood of "Puff, The Magic Dragon", and has much soul and nostalgic philosophy associated with it!

Delightful and enjoyable story, lovely lady!
| Posted on 2008-04-17 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
  It reminds me of Eragon without all the wars and battles.I like this b/c i can see the dragon flying over mountains emerging from it's own breathing fire in mid air.I just try to imagine it sleeping.I say it deserves 5stars.You call this a long piece but actuAlly it's just average.But hey maybe it's just long to you right? yeah figures .*THUMBS UP*.Peace and inspiration Epi.If everyone cared....
| Posted on 2008-04-16 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]
  Where selflessness reigned
Truly the "i"
was more "we"

What truth lies in these words! We seemsto be living in the age of "what's in it for me?". I'd say bring back the dragons.

:-) Sharon
| Posted on 2008-04-16 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]

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