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    dots Submission Name: Upside downdots
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    Author: CourtneyLynne
    ASL Info:    23/female/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 74/70/56
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Romance
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    Turn me upside down
    turn me inside out
    what you do to me
    I can't live without
    with your sweetest charms
    with a kiss that stays
    you show your love for me
    in a million ways
    now I see it's right
    now I can't let go
    with your hold on me
    how I love you so
    don't ever walk away
    don't leave me sitting here
    please don't let me free
    it's my greatest fear..
    You turn me upside down
    you do it every day
    I'll have you for myself
    in every single way.




    Submitted on 2008-04-16 19:04:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      *smiles*
    this is a lovely piece...
    *melts*
    lol... simple but gets the point across
    ^-^
    | Posted on 2008-12-04 00:00:00 | by rubymoon | [ Reply to This ]
      The simple passion held in your words, exhibited with confidence, as an offering, it does your writing a great deal. While there is little need to match your words every other line, you do so without compromising your message...

    I would not stray too far from the meter, count your syllables, experiment with words...though, to be sure, there is no wrong way to offer your heart to someone, as you have done here with words.

    Well done.
    | Posted on 2008-04-16 00:00:00 | by wonderbread1000 | [ Reply to This ]
      LOVE IT!!! it's got great rythym and the passion is soo cute bt serious in the same manner!
    | Posted on 2008-04-16 00:00:00 | by Kaygrl | [ Reply to This ]
      LOVE IT!!! it's got great rythym and the passion is soo cute bt serious in the same manner!
    | Posted on 2008-04-16 00:00:00 | by Kaygrl | [ Reply to This ]


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