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    dots Submission Name: Tally Chart of Momentsdots

    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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       I worte this last ngiht at the SLAM. I didn't know I was gonna get picked and i had lost my last one before it so I didn't have one and I wrote this. ENJOY

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    dotsTally Chart of Momentsdots

    You're stolen away from me,
    And I'm lost inside my soul.
    Nothing here's complete.
    Without you i'm not whole.
    Mesmerized by darkness,
    Trapped in a black hole.
    Memories of happiness,
    And a love i cant control.
    Waiting here, for you,
    for the return of what is MINE.
    Not exactly knowing,
    When I'll see you next time.
    And yet I love you dearly,
    Like artificially sweetened lime.
    Cuz its my favorite flavor,
    And you're my favorite guy.
    And I'm not ready to lose you,
    But the time keeps flying by.
    And with every second passing,
    I'm adding another line,
    To a tally chart of moments,
    That you could have shared with me.
    And I'm waiting for the hour,
    When we're finally free.
    We'll be flying over clouds,
    And dancing near the sea,
    When I'm lying next to you,
    And you're dreaming next to me.

    Submitted on 2008-04-17 12:56:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Excellent! This has excellent structure, rhyme, and rhythm, and tells a wonderful story! Can't get much better than that!

    Well done, lovely lady!
    | Posted on 2008-04-17 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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