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    dots Submission Name: Fish for Thoughtdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    dotsFish for Thoughtdots
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    IN the sky there are circles that I canít see
    But they are there and if I KNOW
    I BELIEVE

    In a way connected piece to piece
    And what is
    Is perceived

    Just to KNOW doesnít satisfy peace
    There is still WHY
    that I donít SEE




    Submitted on 2008-04-17 17:41:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It's weak, overall. Explain what you're trying to convey to me.
    | Posted on 2008-04-22 00:00:00 | by Sir Jimeth | [ Reply to This ]
      abtractish...interesting, but not my cup of tea.
    | Posted on 2008-04-18 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]


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