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    dots Submission Name: Rakuendots
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    Author: Black Angel
    ASL Info:    15/F/Tx
    Elite Ratio:    1.94 - 12/78/71
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Trapped
    Total Views: 101
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1040



    Description:
       Well it was supposed to be a lulaby, but it turned slightly sadistic, i donno. It's supposed to be read slowly, and it's hard to get the turn with out hearing it song. There wasn't really supposed to be any rhyming because I wanted to see if I could have a song flow with out rhyming and it worked. I'll try to have me singing the song uploaded so you can hear how it goes. Also, the part in a different language is translated in the poem. So
    "Suute toroh ne shetea
    Doko dewa sotote
    Neeshee caru mede
    Doko dewa sademadea"

    is translated into

    "Your eyes now open, wide awake
    Look around you still in hell
    The only way to escape
    Is eternal sleeping"

    so yea.....um......and I think thats all. Any other questions PM them to me.

    Also the title is Japanese for Paradise


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    dotsRakuendots
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    Suute toroh ne shetea
    Doko dewa sotote
    Neeshee caru mede
    Doko dewa sademadea

    Your eyes now open, wide awake
    Look around you still in hell
    The only way to escape
    Is eternal sleeping

    Sleep young child don’t you wake
    Spread your wings and fly away
    Escape from this hell
    And find your paradise

    You need not what they say
    You will find your own way
    Only you know where it is
    Your path to paradise

    Soft word lulling you to sleep
    Close your eyes and drift away
    Lunar flowers blanket you
    Dreaming of paradise

    Suute toroh ne shetea
    Doko dewa sotote
    Neeshee caru mede
    Doko dewa sademadea

    Your eyes now open, wide awake
    Look around you still in hell
    The only way to escape
    Is eternal sleeping

    Suute toroh ne shetea
    Doko dewa sotote
    Neeshee caru mede
    Doko dewa sademadea




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