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    dots Submission Name: The Hell Which is My Minddots
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    Author: Vampiric Death
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 133/159/91
    Words: 33
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Hell Which is My Minddots
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    I hate this place and all that it is,
    vile, repulsive, holding me here.
    I fight to get out, I scream for attention,
    yet I would rather stay because she is near.




    Submitted on 2008-04-18 15:39:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Almost like a chant, it was nice. It was short, but still had a lot of emotion. TheStillSilence may have been a little thrown off, but my favorite line was "I fight to get out, I scream for attention," it's pretty much the story of my life. I would usually tell someone to add more to it, but I think this is good the way it is.

    Nice Write
    ~*~katara~*~
    | Posted on 2008-05-08 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]
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    | Posted on 2008-04-22 00:00:00 | by cor | [ Reply to This ]
      Short, but good. I def can relate to wat u're saying about screaming in want to get out.

    one thing that sort of threw me off was "I scream for attention".

    I'm not quite sure how getting attention is relating to an escape.

    But i wasn't expecting the end; that was a nice surprise! =]
    | Posted on 2008-04-18 00:00:00 | by TheStillSilence | [ Reply to This ]


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