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Asking the Most of Yourself

Author: Peggy Paris
ASL Info:    61/F/USA
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Words: 62
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Asking the Most of Yourself

Loyalty takes what many won’t give;
Faithful and true’s a hard way to live.
Ask all us sinners; facts not denied,
Many have wavered; many have lied.

Trust is a treasure precious and rare.
Faith comes not easy; souls must lay bare.
Find one who’s loyal; find one who’s true.
Look in the mirror. Is that one you?

Submitted on 2008-04-19 21:27:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  cool [censored]. i read a few and they are worth a read, but the words seem general and non personal. try not ryhming it might have some due justice. nonetheless a breath of fresh air in comparison to the rest of the gibberish on this site.
| Posted on 2008-06-19 00:00:00 | by oneinchman | [ Reply to This ]
  Sad truth about human nature, but very true description :) I like the line "Look in the mirror. Is that one you?" I believe this is a very important question for everyone to ask themselves in order to live a better life.

Great poem:)
| Posted on 2008-04-21 00:00:00 | by PrInCeToNgIrL | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a great write with a great ending. The theme of your poem and the content is very insightful.
| Posted on 2008-04-20 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh wow. I had no idea it would be this insightful, and the ending was a pleasant surprise.
I really love this. And most of us do not fall into this catagory, sadly. I dont really fall into it, and truthfully we all lie at one point or another.
One thing I was thinking when when through reading was, Honesty and loyalty dont nessarily go hand in hand. I consider myself loyal to certain people, and therefore id lie for them. But maybe you only ment lieing to those you are supposedly loyal?

Very great write.
I enjoyed it so much I think ill check out more of your works :)
| Posted on 2008-04-20 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
  I love the opening lines to this poem:

'Loyalty takes what many won’t give;
Faithful and true’s a hard way to live.'

I think your excellent poem gives all of us a philosophical "slap in the face" at a time when a philosophical reminder might be very much in order! I am old enough to remember a world with far less luxuries and creature comforts, and I can't help but think that character development has been lost in today's world in favor of comfort and self-indulgence!

Excellent philosophical write, lovely lady!
| Posted on 2008-04-20 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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