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    dots Submission Name: Asking the Most of Yourselfdots

    Author: Peggy Paris
    ASL Info:    61/F/USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 747/570/167
    Words: 62
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsAsking the Most of Yourselfdots

    Loyalty takes what many won’t give;
    Faithful and true’s a hard way to live.
    Ask all us sinners; facts not denied,
    Many have wavered; many have lied.

    Trust is a treasure precious and rare.
    Faith comes not easy; souls must lay bare.
    Find one who’s loyal; find one who’s true.
    Look in the mirror. Is that one you?

    Submitted on 2008-04-19 21:27:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      cool [censored]. i read a few and they are worth a read, but the words seem general and non personal. try not ryhming it might have some due justice. nonetheless a breath of fresh air in comparison to the rest of the gibberish on this site.
    | Posted on 2008-06-19 00:00:00 | by oneinchman | [ Reply to This ]
      Sad truth about human nature, but very true description :) I like the line "Look in the mirror. Is that one you?" I believe this is a very important question for everyone to ask themselves in order to live a better life.

    Great poem:)
    | Posted on 2008-04-21 00:00:00 | by PrInCeToNgIrL | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a great write with a great ending. The theme of your poem and the content is very insightful.
    | Posted on 2008-04-20 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh wow. I had no idea it would be this insightful, and the ending was a pleasant surprise.
    I really love this. And most of us do not fall into this catagory, sadly. I dont really fall into it, and truthfully we all lie at one point or another.
    One thing I was thinking when when through reading was, Honesty and loyalty dont nessarily go hand in hand. I consider myself loyal to certain people, and therefore id lie for them. But maybe you only ment lieing to those you are supposedly loyal?

    Very great write.
    I enjoyed it so much I think ill check out more of your works :)
    | Posted on 2008-04-20 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the opening lines to this poem:

    'Loyalty takes what many won’t give;
    Faithful and true’s a hard way to live.'

    I think your excellent poem gives all of us a philosophical "slap in the face" at a time when a philosophical reminder might be very much in order! I am old enough to remember a world with far less luxuries and creature comforts, and I can't help but think that character development has been lost in today's world in favor of comfort and self-indulgence!

    Excellent philosophical write, lovely lady!
    | Posted on 2008-04-20 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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