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    dots Submission Name: Sleep and Medicinedots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 41
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsSleep and Medicinedots
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    The sleep and the medicine
    blurred her waking eyes
    until the world
    looked like it was drawn
    in fuzzy pastels
    rendering her mundane bedroom
    with a new beauty
    she almost hated
    when her old vision returned.






    Submitted on 2004-07-01 10:35:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this made me think of the times i've taken NyQuil when i've been sick. i actually wrote something about the NyQuil haze! i liked the mundane bedroom becoming something new and different with the fuzzy pastels. i could just see it!
    | Posted on 2004-07-01 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the fuzzy pastels. it sounds great (and I like things when they sound good). I never had such a experience but it doesn't sound so bad although my room is colorful enough even without medication.
    | Posted on 2004-07-01 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      me! me! me! this is so me in the mornings! the world always looks so pretty because it's all fuzzy and out of focus and i peep outside the window and say to myself, 'such a pretty day'. then of courses, the other senses (and lenses) kick in the veil is off. (not that i regret it, i wouldn't be able to type if it didn't!) enjoyed reading this
    | Posted on 2004-07-01 00:00:00 | by Judy | [ Reply to This ]
      i'm sick myself right now so drugs, no matter how pretty my room got while on them, will always be welcome. interesting spin on being sick, though. to bless the illness which allows you clearance for the medicine and sleep that brings you closer to a prettier realm you've not visited as often as you'd like. good write.

    ~Blue
    | Posted on 2004-07-01 00:00:00 | by blueorchids | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm glad that I don't know how this feels, because it means I've never been that sick, but I can imagine it's a good feeling and a sick feeling all at once.
    You make it sound like you were looking at a picture by Rembrandt, till the stuff wore off, so if that was the intent, great job,
    Dave
    | Posted on 2004-07-01 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      i think that this was good. i have never experianced this but think that to some people that they think life could be better if lived in a drawing or under the spell of medication good job lia
    | Posted on 2004-07-01 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]
      but not in the writing. I don't know, this sort of smells like hospital anaesthetic to me, not a smell I like too much. Never could stand being totally out of control. Not badly written mind you, more a matter of personal taste.
    | Posted on 2004-07-02 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this one Amy, --you have a knack of taking simple everyday happenings and recording them so poetically. Occasionally I am susceptible to optic neuritis--which sometimes has bizarre effects on my vision---I related immediately to this--as the first time i was afflicted, I lay there in bed giggling at how everything looked so soft and muted with the one eye, while with the other it was normal. This was disconcerting for some of customers in my coffee shop--as i had to close one eye to see who they were---then i would sorta giggle as they looked so altered with boths eyes open. I babble sorry--I have pneumonia right now--and it's the meds lol.
    | Posted on 2004-07-15 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      ha i really like this! life always looks so much more fun when youve taken your sleeping meds and in my case (and prolly yours too) you lie awake all night anyways... this is a very cool write! and yeah... life sure is a disappointment when you "wake up" again...
    | Posted on 2004-07-16 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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