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    dots Submission Name: To A Frienddots
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    Author: lynn7
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 297/212/58
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Rant/Love
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    It's not about you and me
    never has been
    It's about some thing more
    someone more powerful
    his plans, not ours
    we just got caught up
    in the mystery

    all I can say is I luv u
    I might have let you down
    but I'm not letting you go
    you don't belong there
    what have you been promised?
    or what have you sold?
    Did you receive all you ask?
    all I know is he's not taking you down
    even if I to suffer for it

    you know there is another way
    the door is closing, but not shut
    what are you scared of?
    that you might lose it all
    or that you might gain it all
    It's always going to black or white
    darkness or light with us
    one of us has to start moving
    we can't wait for forever to come
    So the question is this time
    Do we rise or do we fall?
    Because we'll be together




    Submitted on 2008-04-20 11:54:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Most ably and very well penned piece of poetry here. very few quibbles... nicely and deftly turned (there are some typos which you can find and fix on a re-read) bravo... bravo... bravo...
    | Posted on 2008-04-21 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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