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    dots Submission Name: Reasons Called Black Cloudsdots
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    Author: Midnight Shadow
    ASL Info:    19/f
    Elite Ratio:    2.41 - 46/132/94
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 71
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1078



    Description:
       feeling as if no one ever notices the pain i'm in, especially the ones close to me


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    dotsReasons Called Black Cloudsdots
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    I swallow back these tears
    I just want a witness to understand this
    I知 heading nowhere fast
    imagining and hoping for bliss
    this life is never filled
    I知 so scared and I知 hurting
    the falls not killing
    and I致e got no one around to understand
    so who痴 going to save me

    This is not the first time
    the landing is going to kill me
    I知 hiding the tears behind broken glass
    But no one seems to see me
    within the silence I知 screaming
    I lie here awake with dreams leaking
    the stars seem to be reducing
    behind these reasons called black clouds

    I try to figure myself out
    Who am I this time around
    I hold my breath to see farther down
    Where am I going to land
    I can see the ground below
    covered in raindrops from my eyes
    But no one else seems to mind
    taking out their umbrellas and raincoats
    so is this the means to the end
    As I知 falling from reasons called black clouds





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      so who痴 going to save me
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    so who痴 going to save me?


    Other than that, this is so wonderful. And you have no idea how much I can realate. I wish I couldnt relate and that everything was perfect. But hey, my wishes never came true before, why would they start now?

    Anyways, lovely, powerful write. Ill look at some more of your work asap :P
    | Posted on 2008-04-20 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]


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