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    dots Submission Name: Problems In Minddots
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    Author: Raindrops
    ASL Info:    25/f/Pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    2.48 - 184/213/288
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       Written on April 20, 2008.


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    dotsProblems In Minddots
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    Feeling dead inside
    not a place where I can hide
    Wondering what's wrong
    needing the strength to carry on

    Lord, where are you?
    I know you have not left
    but I feel as if you're far away
    and I'm left here wandering day to day

    My memory fails me
    and it hurts my spirit
    When it isn't you
    that seeps within it

    I'm fed constant lies
    an my spirit's blocked out
    and I know I will die
    when I cannot break this doubt

    My mind blocks out the things I need
    and leaves me here to suffer and bleed
    I'm stretching out to you Lord please see
    My dear Jesus come set me free!




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