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Truly Real

Author: Raindrops
ASL Info:    25/f/Pennsylvania
Elite Ratio:    2.48 - 184 /213 /288
Words: 108
Class/Type: Poetry /Religious
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Written on April 20, 2008.

Truly Real

How can I forget you
for what You've done
But my mind blocks it out
and I lose my freedom

I know what it means
to fight day by day
Hold on to the unseen
and throw my flesh away

Its a struggle to live
the way that I should
but at least You're here with me
to lighten the load.

I could doubt whats inside
cuz I dont feel
but the feelings don't decide
what truly is real

And what truly is real
is that you love me still
and I'm saved cuz I believe
that You are real.

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  hi nice poe.

How can I forget you

for what you have done

my mind blocks you out

if I lose my freedom, you

I know what that means

to fight day in, day out

hold on to the unseen

I give my flesh away

It's a struggle to live

this way that I want

your here with me

to lighten this load.

I doubt what’s inside

because I did not feel

feelings do not decide

what is truly real within

is that you love me more

I’m saved because I believe

that You are really real to me
| Posted on 2008-04-20 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]

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