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    dots Submission Name: "The Weight Of A Single Tear"dots
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    Author: Ron Cole
    Elite Ratio:    3.95 - 2383/1715/240
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dots"The Weight Of A Single Tear"dots
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    A solitary teardrop
    fell from her lovely chin,
    and, light as any raindrop,
    brushed against her skin.

    But its solitary weight
    brought a mighty Castle down,
    a Castle made of dreams
    with a King and golden crown.

    Its falling shattered dreams,
    and battered a loving trust;
    it tarnished golden memories,
    and reverted love to lust.

    The tear was but the first
    of many more to fall,
    a lie and broken trust
    was the cause behind it all.

    No raging Hurricane,
    or storms that all men fear
    could represent more harm
    than that solitary tear.

    Ron Cole
    April 2008




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      Sad are the tears of a lover-
    when futures come tumbling down.
    Hope and smiles are lost to them-
    while trust is trodden down.

    Beautiful Ron, a lovely, heart touching poem.
    Thank you !
    | Posted on 2011-05-13 00:00:00 | by DUSTYTU | [ Reply to This ]
      i cried when i read this...it spoke to me right at this very moment...
    | Posted on 2010-08-27 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      I haven't cried in a long time from reading poetry but this piece is truly magnificent... thank you
    | Posted on 2010-03-08 00:00:00 | by metallichick786 | [ Reply to This ]
      Excuse the french but HOLY SHIT...I LOVE IT, I ABSOLUTELY LOVE. You shouldn't keep beautiful things like that hidden away you know. That needs to be in a song or some famous book...something. You must know what I like to read. I'm just sorry it took me this long to get around to reading it. You've got something in you that I wish I could grasp. I love to write, and if I could, I would do this for a living. But unfortunately I don't have it like that. Again awesome, and its a favorite!
    | Posted on 2008-12-22 00:00:00 | by Jessa | [ Reply to This ]
      my goodness...how to comment on this?
    wow is the first word that comes to mind.

    this is so beautiful and powerful. one tiny tear brings the castle down...this can be so true.
    the castle of dreams, of what 'could have been' perhaps.
    i really feel something from this piece, having been through what i have lately, i can relate to the 'power' behind each tear.
    i get a feeling of loss in this one.
    this is stunning, Ron.
    great write!!
    xx
    | Posted on 2008-07-16 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      what a lucky woman,whose tears can purchase tenderness from a man...

    mine only ever bought tyranny and destruction.

    and people wonder why i do not cry or show emotion!!

    i know i, too am powerless when faced with a woman's tears, i never know how to respond.

    | Posted on 2008-07-09 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
      Well written Ron........

    a very skillful and ingenious way of portaying how instances of failure on one's part can contribute to a lot of heartbreak and wrong..its always best to stand by one's principles and nurture the love that one is fortunate to be blessed with.

    Yes, this was poignant indeed but powerful too, as some of the others who have read this poem have observed.

    Good work...excellent effort.
    | Posted on 2008-06-17 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
      A single tear to measure up with kingdoms. Yes, it's possible and it's one of the greatest truths that can be found when you read between the lines of any kingdom that has come to it's poor fate. If there is such a force it's a force empowered with an even greater one, and it's called love. Dare I dream I would like to do so in the way you do.
    | Posted on 2008-05-27 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so beautiful Ron! It's absolutely amazing...& I totally added it to one of my favourites.
    | Posted on 2008-05-11 00:00:00 | by atonement | [ Reply to This ]
      Touching and so full of insight!!!Each tear drop has its own history. A tear is a visible as well as subtle form of pain and agony.

    So much depth is hidden in a scalding tear and only a poet's heart can interpret its true significance.... as you have done so beautifully in this excellent poem!!!

    I will love to read it several times again.
    | Posted on 2008-04-24 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh, this IS so very excellent, indeed! A twice potent and poignant poem, the first two stanza read like a spell to capture the reader! Wonderful!!! I loved it! bravo... bravo... bravo...
    | Posted on 2008-04-22 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      Powerful stuff, Ron! Your poem is exceptionally well-written and really flows nicely. I'm adding this one to my favorites and it's not even one of your cat poems. :-) Sharon
    | Posted on 2008-04-20 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a beautiful and poignant poem, and its meaning rings so true...one tiny tear can tell volumes.

    Well done, Ron!
    | Posted on 2008-04-20 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]


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