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    dots Submission Name: Foreverdots

    Author: blu_kittin
    ASL Info:    20/F/Garden of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    6.15 - 711/397/207
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Story/Passion
    Total Views: 697
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    Bytes: 598

       Well, this was written with Devour Me, but I felt like they maybe should be separated. I am not so sure, but I am thinking that I might make this a romance thing ala Beatrice Small.
    Whatcha think?

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         "Forever,"he said, his voice rich and dark, silver threads twining around each other as he spoke.
         She was blissful, and she was loves, and she was free, and so she must be taken, kept far away from suave competition.
    they all lusted for her, tried to pull her away, but she was drawn to him, and he made her glow right and beautiful.
         He would rarely touch her, but when he did the world would watch in awe, it's breath bated in fear of the gloriously painful beauty of it.

    Submitted on 2008-04-21 12:24:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This immediately made me think of those old Harlequin romance novels... where the man is dark and brooding, ill-tempered but wanted by all... and the girl is beautiful but willful and deviant. She is kept and guarded for him to cherish. I love it... very creative and pulls the reader right in with the word choice and flow of the lines.

    Brilliant writing!
    | Posted on 2009-04-04 00:00:00 | by Beulah | [ Reply to This ]
      very creative , well written , have character, good work , checkout my poems
    | Posted on 2009-03-28 00:00:00 | by JoJoCrab | [ Reply to This ]
      A strange, but very well written piece! question: ("..and she was loves..."?)
    | Posted on 2008-05-19 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]

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