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    dots Submission Name: Foreverdots
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    Author: blu_kittin
    ASL Info:    18/F/The Emerald City
    Elite Ratio:    6.16 - 687/384/203
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Story/Passion
    Total Views: 80
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 598



    Description:
       Well, this was written with Devour Me, but I felt like they maybe should be separated. I am not so sure, but I am thinking that I might make this a romance thing ala Beatrice Small.
    Whatcha think?


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    dotsForeverdots
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         "Forever,"he said, his voice rich and dark, silver threads twining around each other as he spoke.
         She was blissful, and she was loves, and she was free, and so she must be taken, kept far away from suave competition.
    they all lusted for her, tried to pull her away, but she was drawn to him, and he made her glow right and beautiful.
         He would rarely touch her, but when he did the world would watch in awe, it's breath bated in fear of the gloriously painful beauty of it.




    Submitted on 2008-04-21 12:24:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A strange, but very well written piece! question: ("..and she was loves..."?)
    | Posted on 2008-05-19 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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