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    dots Submission Name: trenches will never be cleansed with fresh snowdots
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    Author: Alexandra
    ASL Info:    19/f/SC
    Elite Ratio:    1.89 - 54/76/57
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Betrayal
    Total Views: 181
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    dotstrenches will never be cleansed with fresh snowdots
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    how many burns doest it take to learn:
    how many brands till third degree burns
    the iron is hot, pinstakingly red
    all those books you havent read...
    the scars are reminders of mistakes in the past,
    lessons learned: morals that last
    eighth of a second is all it took
    everything spinning: absorb what you took
    the back of your mind tells you to go:
    but the trenches will never be cleansed with fresh snow




    Submitted on 2008-04-21 20:36:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I liked it. I didn't realy understand it. However it flowed nicely.
    | Posted on 2008-04-22 00:00:00 | by DonkeyMan | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it. Now I'm not a great commentator but this sounds pretty good. but why betrayal, i didn't see really any betrayal, so i am a little confused by that, but still it was good.
    | Posted on 2008-04-22 00:00:00 | by cor | [ Reply to This ]


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