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    dots Submission Name: the quieter islandsdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 214
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    the whole world opens up
    inside mirrors
    too white to let the music in,
    too black to let the light in
    & too small
    to let our shattered images
    push through
    into the great wild
    that we are.

    & we all seem to step off
    on journeys not ready for our love
    into the thickness of the wood
    where children beat their drums
    to the softness of all-mothers touch
    while her smile ..
    bleeds into the center of us all.

    & we're all too blind
    to see the waves
    that tug the tides back through our eyes
    and out onto the repeating air
    that spills from our mouths
    like a map back to heaven.

    wherever the beast goes,
    our minds are sure to follow.
    we have a way with words
    the way the sky
    has a way with birds.

    how can we speak
    when the waste of everything
    crowds past our lips
    to push the honeyed tongue
    to silence?
    i know one word
    that would change the world forever
    if it were said correctly.

    but i'm not the first,
    & to use it
    would be the death of me.
    for now, i hum
    until the breathing summer
    consumes me.
    until the quieter islands
    find a peace within us all...




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