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    dots Submission Name: ITS OVER!dots
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    Author: Kornfreakinabox
    ASL Info:    16/f/massachusetts
    Elite Ratio:    2.11 - 44/61/74
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 48
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 837



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    dotsITS OVER!dots
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    i think i lost this battle
    i see the blood drip down my arm
    i'm trying so hard to win this war
    just because you don';t want me to come to harm

    i'm trying so hard to change
    but its quite a dificult task
    it's so much easier to pretend
    and hide behind my carefree mask

    my decision is final, i've got to stop
    if i dont i will lose the things i hold dear
    thats you my friend
    you've made yourself clear

    i dont want to risk our friendship
    your a big part of my life
    nothing is worth losing you
    especially not this fucking knife

    it feels like it calls to me
    every second of every day
    but i won't let it ruin us
    i won't let it get in the way




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    ||| Comments |||
      You show so much passion and determination through this piece. The emotions speak volumes and the desire is sincere. With all the vulnerability I forgot to look at the flow, the set up and all that other stuff. Give me a minute...

    The i's could be capitalized, the emotions make it flow.

    ~Orange
    | Posted on 2008-04-24 00:00:00 | by orange | [ Reply to This ]



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