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    dots Submission Name: Moving Up Daydots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    18/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.02 - 97/161/101
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 67
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 946



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    dotsMoving Up Daydots
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    It was moving up day,
    That first year,
    Hurt like a heart attack,
    My worst fear,
    Write and scribble,
    Worst is the fact of,
    You with hoodie on,
    Think that I lack love,
    (I) Act up, no more
    As well as I fell,
    Case and point, sure
    But too short to tell,
    ....well.....
    I think it’s just me,
    I leave, and since I plead,
    We’ll just have to see,
    ....need....
    That’s my new word,
    Worse is the curse,
    That turns it to a verb
    .....hurt.....
    I relayed it before
    You’dve thought in the scene,
    I stated it before.
    .....fail.......…
    And that’s what I did,
    Through all those stupid little words,
    I was still just a kid

    and I fail you
    and better yet
    I fail you,
    And better yet,
    I fail you
    And better yet,
    I
    do




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