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    dots Submission Name: Broken Agedots
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    Author: forfila
    Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 354/310/188
    Words: 288
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
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    dotsBroken Agedots
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    As a ghost I glide though society unnoticed

    As a witness I am tuning my minds eye into a broad and wide focus

    I am seeing a common recipe for the young to age with tarnished hearts

    Everyone Sprawling and fighting for fractions of a gain, for a sniff of a chance

    No time to know now, no all pushed to push and push back for an advancement

    When they ask why and how their questions only echo in emptiness and turn to dust

    Letting go of their strive, no more drive because everyone is moving to fast.


    Sour and selfish are the minds driving modern culture

    The business is shinny gold

    Greed breeding fortunes in bloodlines and monopolies as silent dictators evolve

    Why does it seem the insanely rich are so cold?

    Why does life feel like a dance around the truth?

    Why does it feel like we live in a time of the forsaken youth.


    I live and breath to know change

    I fight without thought of self gain

    Here now, caught up in this broken age

    In these lonely days

    All around me I watch the hope fade

    No more

    No more I say

    No more pushing tomorrow away

    Now I say

    It's our last generation with a chance

    We cant be afraid

    Or these will be our last days


    2008 Matthew




    Submitted on 2008-04-23 11:27:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      How I wish i could write like you and Epiphany!

    Blissfully, i live in a small, sleepy place where human values are very much alive so i can't relate really. But when we hear that in the town nearby almost 70% guys are drug addicts, it exposes a dark face of advancement.

    So yes, "this is our last generation with a chance"... This is a serious message written very convincingly.

    Very well done!!!
    | Posted on 2008-04-27 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]
      Bravo Matt!!! Yes, there are many weary and worrisome signs of the times. That, to me, is why "IT" is so important to put out and share positive vibes. I gave up my "career" 6 years ago and have drastically changed my life - I want to give and receive love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles and help those who can't see that heaven is not a destination but a state that exists simultaneously and is what life on earth was meant to be - it's there but we've become so blinded.

    So true, also, that we must not be afraid to admit that we are in days that may be numbered - and truly we border on extinction or radical evolution of our planet, our environment, ourselves but as you point out - the norm is not to think of anything outside of our own needs.
    This piece is exactly what I needed to get settled down this afternoon and to bravely plug ahead!
    A fav for sure!
    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    tif ~*~
    | Posted on 2008-04-23 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]


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