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    dots Submission Name: Blanketeddots

    Author: Peggy Paris
    ASL Info:    61/F/USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 747/570/167
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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       Yes, I know I have a wacky sense of humor. I hope you get a smile out of this one.

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    We thought we'd take a romp;
    We chose the best of dates---
    A picnic in the park
    With frisbees, kites, and skates.
    The day soon rolled around;
    The weather looked just great.
    I had a plan in place
    And met her at the gate.

    She brought baguettes and cheese;
    I lugged a lot of wine.
    We ran and played and laughed
    And bathed in bright sunshine.
    She looked so very chic;
    I felt so mighty fine.
    I asked her for a kiss;
    She set her lips on mine.

    The twilight found us there
    With love in finest bloom.
    We would have stayed all night,
    But ants said, “Get a room!”

    Submitted on 2008-04-23 17:12:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      yes, the ending made this for me....

    a very sensual piece disturbed by those annoying insects...:)


    read several of your pieces...nice flow to your work....the rhyme seems easy and uncontrived.
    | Posted on 2011-04-01 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok, truthfully, when I first started reading it, I didn't think it would be that funny. The ants are hilarious. This put a smile on my face.

    | Posted on 2008-04-24 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]
      LOL! Yes this is cute! :D It's got a lovely sing-song type of rhyme too~
    | Posted on 2008-04-24 00:00:00 | by arodase | [ Reply to This ]
      Ha! This is delightful, and the ending is surprising and adds further to the mischief and delight of the of the whole poem!

    Way to go lovely lady! This one gets top marks!!!
    | Posted on 2008-04-23 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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