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    dots Submission Name: The dark ravendots
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    Author: emoxday
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 113/123/144
    Words: 66
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       I think I write better in fantasy rather then reality. Tried to write a poem instead of notes... Teacher thought it was notes and stamped it. :o


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    dotsThe dark ravendots
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    Black Plumes of glistening death
    shadows eternal dwell
    Eyes shaded pools of the River Styx
    chrysanthemums that grow from the depths
    unruly and unprepared
    words enchanting
    Her heart made of the holy blood itself
    tainted by the ominous reality
    stars born from her crystal tears
    death himself is swayed by her words
    luminosity that only she can bring
    once a dove now a raven.




    Submitted on 2008-04-24 00:50:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Dark. I loved the visualizations. It was deep and knowing. I liked the fact that you said she was dove, but is now a raven. It was unique.

    Nice Job.
    | Posted on 2008-04-24 00:00:00 | by BeautifulSoul | [ Reply to This ]


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