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    dots Submission Name: Two Faced Bastarddots
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    Author: deathbelow
    Elite Ratio:    2.7 - 34/43/17
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsTwo Faced Bastarddots
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    My life is stunned
    A revolver- a loaded gun
    Words either have the power to kill or redeem
    Your words have none-

    Our minds met in an underground tunnel
    (closing the miles between us)
    with a little sweat, optimism and false hope
    You said Mama I just wanted you to know
    Your my queen
    My everything
    Now I'm a half unconscious queen
    Fuck that- this time I just want the crown

    You'll drown-
    The plank of reason broke
    And I hope you choke
    (on every word that you ever said)
    Now the bridge is swaying between us
    And I've already forgotten what used to be us--

    Theres a potential for chaos in every syllable of every word
    Time, distance and "love" is blurred.




    Submitted on 2008-04-24 13:06:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very matter-of-fact. Like the display of standing up for self while owning feeling is disgust.

    Nice
    | Posted on 2008-04-25 00:00:00 | by TAMMY HENDRIX | [ Reply to This ]
      holy crud dude that was fantastic! i dont know i cant explain! what i want to know was what you were feeling when you wrote this! its just amazing, it reminds me of a poem i wrote for my ex bf! anyways, great poem i loved it, keep writing never qit stay true! -saragrace-
    | Posted on 2008-04-24 00:00:00 | by Kornfreakinabox | [ Reply to This ]


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