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    dots Submission Name: Palisade of Dreamdots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Gothic
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    dotsPalisade of Dreamdots
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    On opal moons the werewolves call
    Beside some haunted amber stream,
    Their mighty chests they rise and fall
    Above this palisade of dream.

    On dim horizons of these moons
    Abandoned worlds each dusk will ride,
    While Sirens sing enchanted runes
    Where noved suns swarm in a tide.

    Past Saturnís rings the ghost ships veer
    Among the comets where they leap
    Then in the daylight disappear
    Beyond stupendous walls of sleep.

    The Time Stream flows from span to span
    Between the dwarf stars like an aisle
    And ever since long Time began
    Flows like some otherworldly Nile.




    Submitted on 2008-04-24 15:26:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I loved the imagery, but I didn't get much out of it other than just a really nice mental image. I liked it, but I feel like it was somehow incomplete.
    | Posted on 2008-05-04 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]
      I love how it flows and how the imagery makes me feel as if I am there seeing these things. Well written.
    | Posted on 2008-04-25 00:00:00 | by alma-perdida | [ Reply to This ]
      well this flows past without much of a excitement, where is the fun or emotionally driven part of it? or was I not looking in the right direction...?

    should you write a description I might be able to see the picture behind the words
    | Posted on 2008-04-25 00:00:00 | by rawpot | [ Reply to This ]
      Nicely written, I like it. Not sure what it all means but I like it. I think you're a good story teller.


    The Poor Man's Poet.
    | Posted on 2008-04-24 00:00:00 | by Bobby K | [ Reply to This ]


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