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    dots Submission Name: Intertwineddots
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    Author: girly101
    Elite Ratio:    3.92 - 264/224/127
    Words: 237
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 71
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    This man of secrets,
    Man of masks.
    Revealed to me his truth,
    kept hidden since departure from youth.

    Oh please smile my love,
    I wish I could tell you it'll get better,
    that this horrible pain,
    wont last forever.

    But I think you already know,
    the world is as it seems.
    You've already changed to go with the flow,
    On the outside is a conformed stranger.

    Inner hurts torment,
    though a smile plays across your face.
    You may be angel or sinner sent,
    But I love you regardless of place.

    Let us walk the path of darkness,
    Hand in hand, heart in heart.
    Singing in a whispear,
    Of how we will never part.

    Dark does not always bring evil,
    As light doesnt always bring good.
    If I could kiss away your tears,
    The gods only know I would.

    Kiss me in your arms,
    And you may see me melt.
    Whispear of our love,
    Embrace this emotion ive never felt.

    Oh my beautiful angel,
    If you ever leave this earth.
    Dont forget to take thee with you,
    Life without you loses all worth.

    And upon our dieing breathe,
    Our spirits will depart our bodies.
    They will not fear death,
    They will glow with happiness.

    Souls now free and unchained,
    They will flow together.
    And on that day two souls will become one,
    No more tough storms to weather.




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      I absolutely love this poem. One could in fact write one of their own inspired by this alone. The emotions are sincere and not forced. You appear to share a deep and almost spiritual connection to the "Man of Secrets".

    Call me a hopeless romantic but this was my favorite part:

    Oh my beautiful angel,
    If you ever leave this earth.
    Don't forget to take thee with you,
    Life without you loses all worth.

    Usage of the word "thee" instead of "me" puts a certain innocent quality into this that is unsurpassed. The ending is great too. It is clear that you love this person, and if I had to guess I would say he loves you just as deeply but is held back by some unknown entity. This darkness for lack of a better term. But it allows for a redemption and unification of sorts, no matter how tragic which IMO is the greatest theme of all great literature.

    I would love to know if I was close in my interpretation.
    | Posted on 2008-04-28 00:00:00 | by Immortalis | [ Reply to This ]
      As usually a very well spoken poem. Most people can not write very long poems and get it right, but I must say you do. A lot of people jsut end up rambling on trying to make it longer, but you actually made it all fit together. I really liked it. I can't pick any lines as my favorite for they are all very good, but I really did like these two...

    If I could kiss away your tears,
    The gods only know I would.

    You spoke of love very well and about your affection for this person. It was a fantastic poem.

    Good Job.

    Beautiful Soul
    | Posted on 2008-04-25 00:00:00 | by BeautifulSoul | [ Reply to This ]


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